You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The graph
showed
the number of Wrong verb form
shows
shops
which were closed and opened between 2011 up
to 2018 .
Based on the figures information provided the data that accuracy quite clearly indicates. The results were fluctuating between these years. In 2011 the opening Change preposition
apply
shops
were the highest compared to closured
Correct your spelling
closed
shops
with approximately
valuables 9500 and 6500 Change the adverb
approximate
shops
respectively. Then
after one year opened shops
value were
dropped very quickly reached Unnecessary verb
apply
to
4000 Change preposition
apply
shops
compared to closing shops
which slightly reduced about 6000.
Then
as noted in 2014 both shops
were almost equal number about 6200 shops
. Suddenly, closured
Correct your spelling
closed
shops
had been dropped the lowest values during this
period of time . Might
be several reasons behind that .But ,between 2016 and 2018 the average was almost stable.Correct pronoun usage
There might
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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