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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and the rest of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and the rest of the world.
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The following report will explain the contrast of
water
usage
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San
Diego
,
california
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California
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 and The rest of the
world
overall
 the 3 charts of those places, mention the
water
usage
of
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for
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 different purposes, The Residential
Industry
 and
Agriculture
 area.
The
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Residential
water
 is the
bigest
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biggest
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 percentage on
2
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the 2
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charts,
San
Diego
 and
california
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California
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,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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world wide
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worldwide
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 is the lowest percentage, so that gives us
an
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the
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 idea that we
coud
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could
 not base the
water
useage
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usage
 on just a country or state, because it changes
world wide
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worldwide
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.
Wordlwide
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Worldwide
 the
Agriculture
 reason is the
higest
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highest
 number of the other two reasons, but on
california
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California
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 and
San
Diego
 county
Agriculture
.
Usage
 of
water
 is the smallest
porcentage
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percentage
 out of, Residential and
industry
 purposes. The graph
show
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shows
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 us that there's not a lot of
Agriculture
on
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in
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 the country
due to
the
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apply
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17% of the
water
is
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used for
this
cuse
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cause
Industry
 has
increase
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increased
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 a lot in
california
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California
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 having a 33
porcentage
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percentage
 of
usage
.
Finally
,
the
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water
 is our
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most
mos
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most
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 important resource so we need to take care of it, The
industry
 has the second place of use in the
world
 so we should be more aware of
this
, and
San
Diego
 should increment solutions for the Residential
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, san, diego, california, world, industry, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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