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The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the
factors
 regarded as the most significant for a
business
 to succeed by surveyees in Europe and the USA.
Overall
, the character of the director and style of managing the
business
 were the most important and the political situation was the least for Americans. Europeans
also
 considered the management of the
business
 to be the major factor
whereas
 external
factors
 to be the minor by Europeans. Starting with the results of the survey given by Americans, the personality of the director and the style of
business
 had the largest proportions with 40%. The lower percentage of people answered national security
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just below 20% and only less than 10% of people believed external
factors
 were essential.
Furthermore
, the political situation had the lowest rate with approximately 5%. Turning to the response of Europeans,
business
 management was
also
 believed to be the most crucial element with nearly 40%, which was a little higher than that of Americans. Regarding the political situation, the personality of the manager and the national economy,
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they ranged
 from under 20% to slightly above 20%.
Lastly
, the external
factors
 were the least selected with below 10%.
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