The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the figures for moviegoers in a certain country, grouped
according to
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different
age
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ages
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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at the beginning of the period,
aged
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those aged
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14-24 had the highest preference to go to the cinema,
while
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the oldest group
was
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had
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the lowest. Except for
aged
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those aged
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over 50, the three younger groups experienced a diminished trend in 2008. Looking at the diagram in more detail, in the year 1978, there were 90% of the youth (14-24
years
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old), 80%
young
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of young
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adults (25-34
years
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old), 60% of
the
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apply
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middle-aged adults (35-40
years
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old) and 40% of the older adults (over 50
years
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old). A decade later, there was a nearly 20% point decrease in all groups, with 72%, 60%, 40% and 20%, respectively. Interestingly,
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by stars, more and more people had a higher motivation to watch
movie
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movies
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in the theater, which bounced back
the
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same level in 1978. Between 1998 and 2003, the proportion of each age
groups
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group
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remained
steadily
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. Despite higher cinema attendance by youngsters, only those persons who were over 50 rose to around 50% toward the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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