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The chart below shows percentages of people choosing different ways to reduce greenhouse gases in four different countries in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows percentages of people choosing different ways to reduce greenhouse gases in four different countries in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph depicts the four methods citizens in four European
countries
 chose to
minize
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minimise
greenhouse
 gases by the year 2005.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 each
countries folks
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country
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 prioritized
to
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different measures to tackle
with
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the problem of
greenhouse
gas
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gases
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. The people in Portugal responded the most to respond
the
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 call for environmental actions. Looking at the diagram in more detail, among the given
countries
, the people of Portugal
seems
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 to be more active in reducing
greenhouse
 gas. There were 40% of
residences
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residents
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 in Portugal adopted the government regulations, which was nearly
three fifths
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 higher than the second country, which was Poland, with about 28%. The third and fourth
countries
 were
Estonia
 and
Holland
, which
differing
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 merely 2%(18% and 16%). Interestingly, there was the same percentage of people in Portugal and Poland being willing to alter their
life styles
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lifestyles
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, with 30%, and there was
similar
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a similar
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 situation in
Estonia
 and
Holland
, with only 10%.
Although
 government regulations and
life style
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lifestyle
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 were not the types for those residences in
Estonia
 and
Holland
, it doesn't mean that these two
countries
 did not want to attend the action of diminishing
greenhouse
 gas.
Instead
, there were 30% and 20% of persons in
Holland
 chose advanced technology and others to improve the Earth's environment,
and
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while
 the figures for those in
Estonia
 were 20% and 18%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, greenhouse, estonia, holland with synonyms.
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