Is it approprite for students and teachers to be friends on Facebook? How much do you agree or disagree with this opinion and why? Giver reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays people can make
friends
through a lot of social
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, one of the most popular
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is
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people
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able to meet with strangers, but
also
can meet their relatives or even their
teacher
. In my opinion, being
friends
with
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Facebook
will lead to several advantages. The main positive development when
students
and
teachers
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friend
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through
Facebook
is that
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social media can be the newest channel
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educational material. It clearly can be seen as a positive way
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sophisticated technology could bring to society.
Furthermore
, there
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a wide options about what to post and how a person
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their post to be seen
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Facebook
, they can really take control of it. The
teachers
could perform a text or video about the lesson at their timeline and make the
students
are being
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exposed to it.
For instance
, when
teachers
repost/comment on something
that is
related to the study,
as a
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the
students
that are already
become
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friends
will be able to see the whole information.
This
make
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makes
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Facebook
become more useful by connecting the
teacher
and
student
.
Secondly
, the advantage of
teacher
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teachers
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and
student
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students
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becoming
friends
in
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Facebook
is the
teachers
can have a deeper connection and understanding about their
students
.
Moreover
,
this
can lead to a better approach for
teachers
that they could use in the class
for making
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the learning processes
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more enjoyable.
For example
, once the
teachers
has
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a connection
in
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Facebook
with their
students
, there is a bigger chance for the
teachers
to know what
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their
students
prefer to
, what
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is their hobby, and what kind of activity
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they love the most. The fact that those information
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useful for them to determine how is the best way to improve their understanding as simple as by making
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using something
that is
related to their hobby or their interest. In conclusion,
Facebook
is coming to society with lots of positive and negative things. I side with those people who see the connection between
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and
student
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facebook
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as a positive development. The reasons are because it could bring new
channel
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channels
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for giving educational material and enhance the approach of
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to the
student
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students
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through the learning processes.
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Introduction
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Development of Ideas
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Linking Words
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Conclusion
End your conclusion with a stronger statement. While you have summarized your argument, a powerful closing sentence can leave a lasting impression on the reader.
Supporting Examples
Your use of specific examples to support your argument (educational material sharing, personal insights from social media) is effective in demonstrating your points.
Organization
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Task Achievement
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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Boundary issues
  • Professional relationship
  • Formal relationship
  • Discipline
  • Privacy concerns
  • Personal information
  • Social activities
  • Perceptions
  • Professionalism
  • Hierarchy
  • Informal
  • Disruptive
  • Learning environment
  • Direct access
  • Immediate responses
  • Assignments
  • Educational discussions
  • Foster relationships
  • Formal channels
  • Age-appropriateness
  • Impressionable
  • Informal interactions
  • Digital literacy
  • Digital citizenship
  • Role models
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