Is it approprite for students and teachers to be friends on Facebook? How much do you agree or disagree with this opinion and why? Giver reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people can make
friends
through a lot of social medias
, one of the most popular Correct your spelling
media
one
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ones
Facebook
. In
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On Facebook
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people Add a comma
facebook,
are not only be
able to meet with strangers, but Change the verb form
are not only
also
can meet their relatives or even their teacher
. In my opinion, being friends
with teacher
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teachers
in
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on
Facebook
will lead to several advantages.
The main positive development when students
and teachers
are becoming
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become
friend
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friends
Facebook
is that the
social media can be the newest channel Correct article usage
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to
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for
the
educational material. It clearly can be seen as a positive way Correct article usage
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how
sophisticated technology could bring to society. Change preposition
of how
Furthermore
, there are
a wide options about what to post and how a person Correct subject-verb agreement
is
want
their post to be seen Change the verb form
wants
in
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on
the
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Facebook
, they can really take control of it. The teachers
could perform a text or video about the lesson at their timeline and make the students
are being
exposed to it. Wrong verb form
be
For instance
, when teachers
repost/comment on something that is
related to the study, as a
result
the Add the comma(s)
result,
students
that are already become
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friends
will be able to see the whole information. This
make
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makes
Facebook
become more useful by connecting the teacher
and student
.
Secondly
, the advantage of teacher
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teachers
student
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students
friends
in
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on
Facebook
is the teachers
can have a deeper connection and understanding about their students
. Moreover
, this
can lead to a better approach for teachers
that they could use in the class for making
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to make
become
more enjoyable. Verb problem
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For example
, once the teachers
has
a connection Change the verb form
have
in
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on
Facebook
with their students
, there is a bigger chance for the teachers
to know what theor
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their
students
prefer to, what
is their hobby, and what kind of activity Add a missing verb
do, what
that
they love the most. The fact that those information Correct pronoun usage
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are
useful for them to determine how is the best way to improve their understanding as simple as by making Correct subject-verb agreement
is
example
using something Fix the agreement mistake
examples
that is
related to their hobby or their interest.
In conclusion, Facebook
is coming to society with lots of positive and negative things. I side with those people who see the connection between teacher
and student
in
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on
facebook
as a positive development. The reasons are because it could bring new Capitalize word
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channel
for giving educational material and enhance the approach of Fix the agreement mistake
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teacher
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