The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates
that
how many males and females were employed in seven different positions in Australia Correct word choice
apply
last
year. Linking Words
Overall
, we can see that there Linking Words
were
Change the verb form
was
severe
gender gap, and the Correct article usage
a severe
number
of males Use synonyms
were
more than females except for professionals and clericals.
Regarding Change the verb form
was
of
men, the most popular job Change preposition
apply
was trades
and Change the verb form
was trading
second
was clerical. Specifically, there were 900,000 tradespeople and 800,000 clerical. Other jobs had under 700,000 Correct article usage
the second
people
, but at least over 400,000 and the lowest Use synonyms
number
was labourers.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
Add an article
the inclination
an inclination
inclination
of women Fix the agreement mistake
inclinations
were
completely different. The highest Change the verb form
was
number
of Use synonyms
employer
was clerical , and the second highest was professionals. Looking more closely, there Fix the agreement mistake
employers
was
just under 1,000,000 Change the verb form
were
people
in clerical, followed by professionals at 7,000,000 Use synonyms
people
. Others were not over 400,000, and Tradespeople and Use synonyms
people
in production had the same Use synonyms
number
and lowest in all positions. More specifically, there were 100,000 Use synonyms
people
in each Use synonyms
jobs
Change to a singular noun
job
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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