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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table and pie charts
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 the origin of the
police
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budget
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 and the ways the
money
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 was spent respectively during 2 years from 2017 to 2018 in a specific place
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 the United Kingdom. In 2017, the national government provided the largest amount of
money
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 showing the number of 175.5m
pounds
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while
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 local taxes were the second main source to contribute to the
police
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budget
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 with the amount of 91.2m
pounds
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.
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,
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the figure for the
budget
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 coming from other sources including grants was only 38m
pounds
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 showing the total
police
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budget
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 was 304.7m
pounds
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as a result
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 in 2017. Compared with the year
of
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2018, similar features can be seen in both the origin of the
police
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budget
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 and the distributions of the
money
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.
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 figures for the
money
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 coming from the national government, local taxes and other sources are 177.8m
pounds
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, 102.3m
pounds
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 and 38.5m
pounds
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 respectively indicating 318.6m
pounds
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 in total. The percentages of the distribution to salaries and the percentage of the distribution to technology decreased from 75% to 69% and increased from 8% to 14% respectively during the 2 years
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 the figure for the
money
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 distributed to buildings and transport remained unchanged (17%).
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, in these two years, the national government was the most significant source of the
police
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budget
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 and most of the
money
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 was paid for salaries of officers and staff.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, m, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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