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The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the Australine
export
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exports
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 to Japan, America,
China
 and
India
 from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
,
export
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the export
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rate
 of Japan,
US
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the US
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 and
india
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India
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 showed
a
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steady
while
 the percentage of
export
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exports
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 in
China
 experienced a significant rise over the period. In detail, in 1990 the
export
 proportion of
China
 and
India
were
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 nearly 0% for both countries.
China
's
rate
 increased sharply
throught
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through
throughout
 the period, exceeding all
countray
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country
 almost 30% in 2012. In
meantime
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the meantime
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, the percentage of
export
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exports
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 to
India
 was
in
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apply
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steady
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a steady
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 state
untile
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until
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 2000
and
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increase
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increased
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 from 2005 to 2006 and
return
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returned
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 to
drop
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a drop
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 in 2012 which is the lowest. Moving on
the
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to the
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 rest
exports
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of exports
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, in 1990 the
export
rate
 of Japan (30%) was the highest among the fourth
counries
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countries
.
However
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 it
decline
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declined
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withine
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within
with
 the years until it
reach
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reached
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 less than 20% in 2012. The US
rate
 in 1990 was 10% and it
is
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fluctuated until it
reach
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reached
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 less than 10 %
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, china, india, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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