The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The bar graphs above
shows
the data about Change the verb form
show
people
living in rural, urban and town
who Fix the agreement mistake
towns
birth
in Verb problem
were born
Australia
or out from
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of
Australia
from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, there were different kinds in
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of
people
born in or outside Australia
namely cities
, towns and rural areals
. There Correct your spelling
areas
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was
were
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was
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a fluctuation
fluctuation
increase Correct article usage
a fluctuation
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in
on
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in
people
born in Australia
while
people
born outside Australia
were
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apply
decrease
.
Remaining Correct your spelling
decreased
to
the Change preposition
apply
people
born in Australia
, there was dramatic
increase Add an article
a dramatic
on
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in
people
born in cities
which accounted for approximately 60 reports
from cities
in 2010. In addition
, there were
Change the verb form
was
dramatic
decrease Correct article usage
a dramatic
on
towns and rural areas which accounted Change preposition
in
less
than 20 Change preposition
for less
reports
repetively
in 2010.
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repetitively
respectively
According to
the people
born outside Australia
, there was dramatic
increase Add an article
a dramatic
on
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in
people
born in cities
and almost accounted for 80 reports
in 2010. Additionally
, there were
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was
dramatic
decrease Correct article usage
a dramatic
on
towns and rural areas Change preposition
in
and
accounted for under 20 Correct word choice
apply
reports
in 2010.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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