The pie chart below shows the amount of money that a chldren's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year

The pie chart below shows the amount of money that a chldren's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year
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The pie chart
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depicts
expenditures and revenue
sources
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of a children's
charity
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in the USA in one year.
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, it is seen that food is the largest part of donated
sources
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and the primary
expenses
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expense
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of the
charity
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is program services.
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, it is noteworthy that the most imperative to the children is
the
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education. With regards to things that the
charity
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received, the total revenue is 53,561,580$ and donated food
account
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accounts
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for the majority of
sources
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(86.6%). The revenue was
come
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from the community
contibutions
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contributions
is just only 10.4%.
Government
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The government
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subsidise only 0.2% of the total
sources
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. It is the same with the amount of income from investment. The size of other
sources
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combined (3%) is smaller than the proportion of contributions
come
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from the society. The
charity
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spent 53,224,896$ in one year.
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the expenditures related to
the
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fundraising and management and general
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only account for 2.6% and 1.6%, respectively, the
charity
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spent the almost whole money
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program services( 95.8%)
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, charity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • amount of money
  • children's charity
  • expenses
  • sources of income
  • spent
  • received
  • USA
  • one year
  • introduce
  • overview
  • main findings
  • overview
  • body paragraph
  • summarize
  • final thought
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