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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph illustrates the amount of nitrogen oxide in grams per kilometer which
releases
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 from 4 different types of vehicles over the speed of 10 to 130 kilometers per hour. It can be seen buses account for the most
emission
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emissions
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following
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 by lorries regardless of their speed
while
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 diesel and petrol cars are the least producer of nitrogen oxide in all levels of speed. At the speed of 10(
kph
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), buses emission 40(
g
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/
km
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) which is the highest amount in comparison with others. Though at the speed of 60(
kph
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), the emission shows a sink to around 20(
g
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km
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).
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, it grows dramatically and
recover
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 its previous level by more than 40 (
g
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/
km
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) at the speed of 130(
kph
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).
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,
this
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 trend
follows
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 by lorries the second responsible for releasing
of
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apply
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nitrogen oxide.
In
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 the lowest speed, lorries release less than 35(
g
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/
km
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). But
this
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 trend drops sharply to just above 15(
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km
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) at 90(
kph
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) and
then
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rise
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up
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again to less than 25(
g
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km
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) at 130(
kph
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) speed.
On the contrary
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, diesel car emits about 7(
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km
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) at the beginning and despite minor
fluctuations
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 it remains almost steady
at the end
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 with 5(
g
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/
km
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). Petrol
car
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cars
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also
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 release 10 (
g
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/
km
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) at
speed
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a speed
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 of 10(
kph
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) and remain constant with a little increase to 11(
g
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/
km
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) at the speed of 130(
kph
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).
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kph, g, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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