The table below shows the participayion of people over 15 in selected sports and phusical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.

The table below shows the participayion of people over 15 in selected sports and phusical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
The multiple bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian people who regularly did physical activity in 2010, compared by gender in each
age
group. The
age
groups are 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and more than equal to 65.
Overall
, the graph showed that Australian women were developing more interest in sports than men. The female proportion outweighed the male in all
age
categories, except for teenagers (15 to 24) who were slightly dominated by males in the given period. Among the groups that were dominated by
females
, the
age
bracket of 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and 35 to 44 had the biggest portion, with 53.3%, 53%, and 52%, respectively.
Besides
, the male proportion for those brackets was 43.1%, 45.1%, and 39.5%, consecutively.
Similarly
, at the
age
of 25 to 34,
females
proportion was 48.9% and males at 42.2%.
However
, for the
age
65 and over, the difference was less than 1%, but still dominated by
females
.
Lastly
, when it comes to the
age
of 15 to 24, the male percentage surpassed the female with 52.8%, with
females
only at 47.7%.
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