In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. This accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
shoot very good photos with their
smartphones
, which photos are easily shared
with
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on social media platforms. From my perspective, I highly support
this
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idea that
this
results in using professional
photographers
gradually decreasing. In the next paragraphs, I delve into the main reasons in their
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. To commence with the first reason for my agreement
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is related to the convenience of
smartphones
for shooting. Namely, almost all
smartphones
carry with their
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cut-edge technology
properties
.
Therefore
,
people
can either arrange
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them
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some applications or share their pictures in a short time.
Besides
,
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smartphones
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thriving excellent
properties
provides
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not only perfect cameras
,
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but
also
mass memory.
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, many telephones, which have some front and back the highest resolution cameras, can compete with professional
photographers
. One of another significant
reason
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is
smartphones
are lighter than professional
photographers
which makes them easier to carry. Especially, most
people
take photos when they go to travel.
It is clear that
travelers
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bear a lot of suitcases with them.
For
this
reason,
people
prefer to take with their
smartphones
whose features are
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their
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professional
photographers
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features. So, more lighter goods the better for them. What`s more, as
such
many
people
discard or sell their professional
photographers
To conclude
,
smartphones
which have many good camera
properties
are gradually get
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ahead in
its
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competition with professional
photographers
. That’s why they provide convenience both the aspect of them involve
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cut-edge technology
properties
such
as applications and programs placed
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as well as
easy
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and carrying facilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization
  • visual culture
  • composition
  • lighting
  • technical skills
  • proliferation
  • oversaturate
  • niches
  • unique styles
  • replicated
  • high-quality
  • industries
  • underscore
  • showcase
  • collaboration
  • diverse perspectives
  • photographic landscape
  • amateur
  • professional
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