The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare
to
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the proportion of
energy
types
used by Australian households with the proportion of
gas
emission
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emissions
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derived from these
energy
types
. Looking at an
overall
perspective, all
energy
types
, except for heating
energy
, result in
the
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higher
greenhouse
gas
emissions rates than these
energy
types
of usage rates. Heating is the biggest
energy
type, accounting for nearly half of all usage. 15% of heating
energy
used leads to
greenhouse
gas
emissions
while
cooling is the lesser
energy
type, only 2% of all usage, used by Australian householders, and
this
causes
to
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3%
greenhouse
gas
emission
rates.
Using by
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Australian householders heating is the
bigger
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biggest
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energy
type, nearly more than
two fifths
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two-fifths
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(42%). With regard
of
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to
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this
generates
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generated
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greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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,
this
amount
hits
low
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a low
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of 15%. People use water heating, nearly less than
third
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a third
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(30%).
This
amount
grows only 2% to 32%.
Although
cooling is used
lesser
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less
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, 2%, by householders,
this
show
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shows
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up the greater
amount
to 3% as
compare
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compared
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this
using
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apply
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.
Nevertheless
, the lesser
amount
greenhouse
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of greenhouse
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gas
emission
is turned out with cooling. Lighthing and refrigeration
energy
using
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use
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are, 4% and 7%, respectively. These transformate to
greenhouse
gas
emission
amount
increase to two times, 8% and 14%, respectively. Other
applliances
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appliances
energy
are
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is
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used 15% and
this
using
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use
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led to
the
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apply
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less than
fifth
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a fifth
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( 28%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, types, gas, emission, greenhouse, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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