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This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay about a process/diagram on the topic of how to pu’erh tea is made.

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The diagram illustrates both the
process
 of production of Pu-erh Raw
Tea
 and Ripe
Tea
. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, the
process
 consists of eight stages beginning with the frying of
tea
plants
 on a pan and culminating with the production of both
tea
 forms. There are three main steps in
this
process
 entirely starting with the drying of
plants
, followed by the preparation of two different raw teas, and ending with their final products.
To begin
 with, the
process
 starts with frying for inactivating enzymes of
tea
plants
 before rolling dry
tea
plants
. Subsequent to
this
, these fried
plants
 are dried under the sun.
This
process
 ends with obtaining Loose Raw
Tea
.
Then
, some Loose Raw Teas are transformed by way of the compression
process
 to Pu erh Raw
Tea
 form. Following on from
this
, Loose Raw
Tea
, which is unused, is fermented by
mold
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 before compressing.
At the end
 of
this
 compression
process
, it is produced Pu-erc Ripe
tea
.
On the other hand
, Pu erh Raw
tea
 is aged by storage.
This
process
 completes the production of Vintage Pu-erh Raw
tea
.
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Task Achievement
To further improve your task achievement, focus on incorporating a wider range of specific examples that support the main points, especially in describing the different stages of the process.
Coherence and Cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, try to use a wider range of linking devices and cohesive devices. This will help in enhancing the logical flow of information throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively covers all stages of the Pu-erh Tea production process, ensuring a complete response to the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your use of an overall perspective at the beginning of the essay provides a clear introduction to the process, assisting in setting the scene for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure throughout, which makes it easy for the reader to follow the progression of the tea production process from start to finish.

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