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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.
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The bar chart illustrates the ratio of
population
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the population
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 who have
internet
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 access, comparing the urban and rural
household
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households
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 in a particular European country from 1999 to 2004. In broad view, the proportion of people who
able
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are able
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 to explore the
internet
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 shows an upward trend between 1999 and 2004, both in urban and rural areas.
Additionally
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, it is evident that the number of
internet
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 users in urban regions exceeded the one who lived in rural regions throughout the given periods.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of urban
household
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households
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 with
internet
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 access
approximately
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was approximately
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 15% in 1999. A massive jump was witnessed from 1999 to 2000 with around
15
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a 15
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% increase, before
continue
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continuing
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 to
grew
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 sustainably to about 55%
at the end
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 of given periods. In 1999, the
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internet
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number of internet
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 users in rural areas was relatively low, around only 3%. The percentage grew steadily to around 15% in 2002, before experiencing
a
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apply
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significant growth from 2002 to 2004 with
10
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a 10
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% year-on-year increase
reached
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reaching
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 35% in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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