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Band 4.5

You want to book a hotel recommended to you for job meeting

#book #hotel #job
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Dear Ascot Hotel, I would like to reserve an accessible single room for two nights with breakfast on the 22 and 23 of April. Could I have a quiet room with a view if possible, please? I will arrive at about 10 p.m. and I have an early meeting the next morning, so please could you leave an iron and ironing board in the room? I have a promotional code (MH2219). Please can you confirm that it is £80 per night with breakfast included? Please could you confirm the booking? Let me know if you need any
further
 information. Many thanks. With kind regards, David Mathews
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task response
You've done a great job at providing specific details (e.g., dates, room preferences, arrival time, etc.), which meets the requirements of a high-scoring task response. To push towards an even higher score, consider adding a brief reason for your preferences or the context of your stay, as this could enhance the comprehensiveness of your request.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure and logical flow, contributing to its coherence. However, the use of transition words or phrases to connect ideas more smoothly could make your writing even more cohesive.
task response
Specific requests and questions were articulated clearly, which is excellent for task achievement
coherence cohesion
Overall structure well-managed with a clear progression from introducing the booking to specifying requirements

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recommended hotel
  • job meeting
  • location
  • reputation
  • facilities
  • interview
  • conference
  • training session
  • networking event
  • specific requirements
  • quiet room
  • high-speed internet
  • presentation equipment
  • catering services
  • conducive environment
  • comfort
  • privacy
  • professional ambience
  • reliability
  • previous positive experiences
  • special offers
  • business events
  • logistics
  • duration of stay
  • number of attendees
  • planned activities
  • professional relationships
  • securing a job
  • acquiring new skills
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