Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
contemporary era, enhancement of the economic value is vital in ameliorating
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of the
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society
and providing necessities. I
widly beleive
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widely believe
that
growing
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economy is a significant factor in
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maintaining
required
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standardards
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standards
of
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manufacturing
there are detrimental
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to the atmosphere. As
such
it is
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crucial
critical
that measures
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to mitigate harm caused by development.
This
essay will
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discuss
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of economic advancement and
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its impact
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to
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the environment and provide my
openion
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opinion
. On one hand, in order to ameliorate poverty and other basic
need
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of the population, a country should enhance its financial position. To be more
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precise
, advancement of
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agricultural
agriculture
, science and technological sectors
strenghen
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strengthen
the lifestyle of people.
For example
, expanding cultivation
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new lands would ensure adequate
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food
supply for the country.
Further
, innovation in technology would be affordable if the country's economic growth is
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accelerated
and
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turn more business
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opportunities
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.
On the other hand
, most of the development activities would use natural resources and
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disturb
disturbed
the local eco
sustems
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systems
. As many people
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recently, deforestation and depletion of natural resources
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become a pressing issue.
This
is to say that,
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substantial
growth in
countries
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countries'
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production is a threat to the natural habitats and
envioroment
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environment
environments
as a whole.
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the agrecultural
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agrecultural
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agricultural
industry
had
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desrtoyed
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destroyed
habitats for many wildlife
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species
.
Moreover
, pollution and toxic gases discharged by factories
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the main cause
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global warming.
Overall
, in my
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opinion
, economic growth is of significant importance for the betterment of mankind,
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even though
there are various adverse effects
to
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the environment. The
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government
and the
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society
as a whole should take
actions
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action
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to
mitigare
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mitigate
these damages. Government should
imporse
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impose
rules and regulations about usage of natural resources and to protect
wild life
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wildlife
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. Factories should implement
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ways
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to safely
dispose
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the waste.
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