The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The source of the police budget in one area of Britain from 2017 to 2018 is shown in the table and the expense is illustrated in the pie chart below.
Generally, the
cops
income had increased in 2018 compared to 2017 with a total sum of 318.6m from 304.7m. We can separate it into three sources, Change to a genitive case
cop's
cops'
from
the national government, local taxes, and other sources Change preposition
apply
such
as grants.
The biggest source for the police budget in both years was coming from the national government. Whilst the following order was coming from levy and other.
There are three ways to spend the money, which are officers and staff salaries, technology, and buildings and transport. Those three are represented by the Linking Words
color
grey, white and black, respectively.
Money was distributed mostly to pay the employee’s salaries. In 2017, 75% was used to pay wages, and Change the spelling
colour
decreased
to 69% the next year. Buildings and transport are the second most costly budget. Correct pronoun usage
this decreased
However
, the percentage usage remained the same at 17%. Linking Words
Lastly
, the rest was used for technology and it Linking Words
was
increasedUnnecessary verb
apply
6
% from 2017 to 2018.
In summary, the money for the police department had been acquired mostly from the national government and taxes. All of it Change preposition
by 6
mostly
used to pay salaries.Add a missing verb
is mostly
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