The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the four retail
sector
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sectors
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which are (Electronic &
appliance
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,
food
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&
beverage
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,
home
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furniture and
video
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games
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) in Canada in two different years (2005 & 2010)
Overall
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, electronic &
appliance
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was the highest in the first
year
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,
while
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food
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&
beverage
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was the highest in the second
year
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.
Video
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games
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were the least
in
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popular in
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the first
year
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,
whereas
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home
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furniture dropped in the second
year
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. There was a slight decrease in
electronic
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electronics
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&
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appliance
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appliances
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and
home
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furniture,
also
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there is an increase in
video
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games
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and
food
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&
beverage
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. The online sales in
food
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and
beverage
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were 22% in 2005,
then
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increased to one-third 32% in 2010.
Video
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games
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game
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sales grew from 18% to 23% in 2010. The sales in electronics and
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appliance
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appliances
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were 35% and decreased to 30% in 2010.
While
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in 2005
home
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furnishing was exactly a quarter
25
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of 25
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% and fell to 15% in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliance, food, beverage, home, video, games, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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