The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate the four retail
sector
which are (Electronic & Change to a plural noun
sectors
appliance
, food
& beverage
, home
furniture and video
games
) in Canada in two different years (2005 & 2010)
Overall
, electronic & appliance
was the highest in the first year
, while
food
& beverage
was the highest in the second year
. Video
games
were the least in
the first Correct word choice
popular in
year
, whereas
home
furniture dropped in the second year
. There was a slight decrease in electronic
& Replace the word
electronics
appliance
and Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
home
furniture, also
there is an increase in video
games
and food
& beverage
.
The online sales in food
and beverage
were 22% in 2005, then
increased to one-third 32% in 2010. Video
games
sales grew from 18% to 23% in 2010.
The sales in electronics and Change the noun form
game
appliance
were 35% and decreased to 30% in 2010. Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
While
in 2005 home
furnishing was exactly a quarter 25
% and fell to 15% in 2010.Change preposition
of 25
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliance, food, beverage, home, video, games, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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