The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate the four retail
sector
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sectors
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which are (Electronic &
appliance
,
food
&
beverage
,
home
furniture and
video
games
) in Canada in two different years (2005 & 2010)
Overall
, electronic &
appliance
was the highest in the first
year
,
while
food
&
beverage
was the highest in the second
year
.
Video
games
were the least
in
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popular in
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the first
year
,
whereas
home
furniture dropped in the second
year
. There was a slight decrease in
electronic
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electronics
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&
appliance
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appliances
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and
home
furniture,
also
there is an increase in
video
games
and
food
&
beverage
. The online sales in
food
and
beverage
were 22% in 2005,
then
increased to one-third 32% in 2010.
Video
games
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game
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sales grew from 18% to 23% in 2010. The sales in electronics and
appliance
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appliances
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were 35% and decreased to 30% in 2010.
While
in 2005
home
furnishing was exactly a quarter
25
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of 25
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% and fell to 15% in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliance, food, beverage, home, video, games, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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