The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the four retail
sector
which are (Electronic & Change to a plural noun
sectors
appliance
, Use synonyms
food
& Use synonyms
beverage
, Use synonyms
home
furniture and Use synonyms
video
Use synonyms
games
) in Canada in two different years (2005 & 2010)
Use synonyms
Overall
, electronic & Linking Words
appliance
was the highest in the first Use synonyms
year
, Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
food
& Use synonyms
beverage
was the highest in the second Use synonyms
year
. Use synonyms
Video
Use synonyms
games
were the least Use synonyms
in
the first Correct word choice
popular in
year
, Use synonyms
whereas
Linking Words
home
furniture dropped in the second Use synonyms
year
. There was a slight decrease in Use synonyms
electronic
& Replace the word
electronics
Use synonyms
appliance
and Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
home
furniture, Use synonyms
also
there is an increase in Linking Words
video
Use synonyms
games
and Use synonyms
food
& Use synonyms
beverage
.
The online sales in Use synonyms
food
and Use synonyms
beverage
were 22% in 2005, Use synonyms
then
increased to one-third 32% in 2010. Linking Words
Video
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
games
sales grew from 18% to 23% in 2010.
The sales in electronics and Change the noun form
game
Use synonyms
appliance
were 35% and decreased to 30% in 2010. Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
While
in 2005 Linking Words
home
furnishing was exactly a quarter Use synonyms
25
% and fell to 15% in 2010.Change preposition
of 25
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliance, food, beverage, home, video, games, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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