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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
#population #india #china #year #projections #growth
The graph demonstrates
population
growth
 in two populous
country
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countries
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 in the world:
China
 and
India
. The information provides
prediction
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a prediction
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 of
population
growth
 up to 5 decades from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
,
India
 has
stable
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a stable
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rise
 trend from the beginning of the
period
 until the end of
period
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the period
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.
Otherwise
,
China
 has a
slightly
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 fluctuation in the middle of the
period
,
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 and a little
growth
at
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in
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 the
last
period
.
To begin
,
India
 had one thousand
billion
population
 at the beginning of
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the 21st
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21st
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the 21st
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 century. It has been
arised
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arisen
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 in the next
decade
 for almost one thousand two hundred
billion
population
.
The
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 next
decade
, it will
be
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rise
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rise
 in the amount of 100
billion
 inhabitants.
Therefore
, the
population
 will be more
one
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than one
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 thousand three hundred. The next three remaining decades will be
growth
 consistently around 100
billion
rise
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rises
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 per
decade
.
At the end
 of the
period
,
India
's
population
 will reach 1600
billion
, it will be 600 surplus
population
 from the beginning of the
period
.
Next
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The next
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 country,
China
 started the
population
 data in
total
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a total
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 of 1250. It has
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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rise
number
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in number
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 until 2020. Between 2020 and 2030,
China
's
population
 will remain stable.
In contrast
, for the next
decade
, it will have a little decline until the end of the
period
that
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 the
population
 will be 1400. During the
period
,
China
's
population
growth
 will slightly
rise
 from 1250 to 1400.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, china, india, rise, period, billion, decade with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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