The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
The graph demonstrates
population
growth
in two populous
country
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countries
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in the world:
China
and
India
. The information provides
prediction
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a prediction
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of
population
growth
up to 5 decades from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
,
India
has
stable
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rise
trend from the beginning of the
period
until the end of
period
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the period
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.
Otherwise
,
China
has a
slightly
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fluctuation in the middle of the
period
,
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and a little
growth
at
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the
last
period
.
To begin
,
India
had one thousand
billion
population
at the beginning of
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the 21st
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21st
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the 21st
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century. It has been
arised
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arisen
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in the next
decade
for almost one thousand two hundred
billion
population
.
The
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next
decade
, it will
be
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rise
in the amount of 100
billion
inhabitants.
Therefore
, the
population
will be more
one
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thousand three hundred. The next three remaining decades will be
growth
consistently around 100
billion
rise
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per
decade
.
At the end
of the
period
,
India
's
population
will reach 1600
billion
, it will be 600 surplus
population
from the beginning of the
period
.
Next
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country,
China
started the
population
data in
total
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a total
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of 1250. It has
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a slightly
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slightly
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rise
number
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until 2020. Between 2020 and 2030,
China
's
population
will remain stable.
In contrast
, for the next
decade
, it will have a little decline until the end of the
period
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the
population
will be 1400. During the
period
,
China
's
population
growth
will slightly
rise
from 1250 to 1400.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, china, india, rise, period, billion, decade with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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