The bar chart illustrates how seven European nations spend on relaxing activities as a proportion of total household, while the pie chart demonstrates the tendency of the average yearly expenditure on entertaining activities per household in the U.K.

The bar chart illustrates how seven European nations spend on relaxing activities as a proportion of total household, while the pie chart demonstrates the tendency of the average yearly expenditure on entertaining activities per household in the U.K.
The bar chart illustrates how seven European nations spend on relaxing
activities
as a proportion of total
household
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households
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,
while
the pie chart demonstrates the tendency of the average yearly expenditure on entertaining
activities
per household in the U.K. In general, it is evident that British citizens spend plenty of money on recreational
activities
. They
also
show a preference for outdoor
activities
. Speaking of leisure interests in seven European countries as a proportion, the
U.K
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UK
leads with 21.3 per
cent
. Following closely behind are Germany, Austria, and Sweden at 16.8, 17.7, and 18.4 per
cent
respectively. The next positions are kept by Portugal and Greece which are almost the same at approximately 13 per
cent
. And the lowest place
belonging
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belongs
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to Italy, with just 10.9 per
cent
. Turning to
average
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the average
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yearly expenditure on recreational
activities
in the
U.K
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UK
, outdoor
activities
exceed the rest, at 1431
pounds
,
Culture
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and Culture
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and Sport follow closely at 588
pounds
. Electric Goods and Music
constitutes
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constitute
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an inconsiderable proportion, at 313
pounds
,
while
expenditure on Holidays and Reading Matter is similar, at 268
pounds
.
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