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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society

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In the digital age, humans are being changed by the improved artificial intelligence and robotics in the job. there are several reasons that can be used to
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 businesses to improve productivity and work performance. Simulationally,
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 to reduce costs and limit their time and strength.
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, the replacement of humans with AI and robots
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 to use machines in the period of production
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 society. On the one hand, when people have the support

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Introduce your arguments clearly in the introduction by directly addressing the question. This sets a strong foundation for your essay.
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Develop both sides of the argument to provide a balanced discussion. This essay begins to cover both the reasons for and impacts of AI in the workplace, but it needs more development on its impacts.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to better link your ideas. Phrases like "Furthermore," "On the other hand," and "For example," help to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
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Remember to include a conclusion to summarize your main points and state your personal stance clearly. This will round off your essay effectively.
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Be mindful of grammatical errors and misspellings, such as 'solved' instead of 'solve,' 'Simulationally,' which might be a mistyped 'Similarly,' and 'business's' which should be 'businesses.' Enhancing your accuracy will greatly improve the overall quality of your essay.
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You successfully identified reasons for the integration of AI and robots into the workplace, showcasing clear understanding.
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Your essay demonstrates initial effort towards logical structuring, with an attempt to separate reasons from impacts. This is a good approach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Cost-effective
  • Innovation
  • Technological advancements
  • Job displacement
  • Economic disparity
  • Dependency
  • Cyber-attacks
  • Ethical concerns
  • Moral questions
  • Standard of living
  • Income gap
  • Widespread automation
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