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The maps show the changes of Bell Hill Farm in 1976 and 2006. (Bell Hill Farm in 1976-->Bill Hill Environmental Centre 2006) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the changes of Bell Hill Farm in 1976 and 2006. (Bell Hill Farm in 1976-->Bill Hill Environmental Centre 2006) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
 illustrates the focus
to
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on
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different
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differences
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 in Bell
hill farm
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Hill Farm
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 between 1976 and 2006 . up the map
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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garden
Correct article usage
a garden
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 of coins but in 2006 distry and
change
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changed
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 with cinama .
in
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On
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 the left of
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the garden
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garden
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garden,
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 we show
cow
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a cow
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 shield and down
of
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apply
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them we see
chicken
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a chicken
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garden
 .but in 2006 creature a church.
on
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On
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 the other hand of
road
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the road
a road
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 in the
last
 we see
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a tractour
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tractour
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tractor
tractors
 but in 2006 we see parking.in the center of
environment
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the environment
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 . it was
area
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an area
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 but after 30 years there is
emty
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empty
.house stay in both
place
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places
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 so people can rest them until.
Music
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The music
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 room
is
Verb problem
has
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change
Wrong verb form
changed
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 the view of
garden
Correct article usage
the garden
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 and cow can not live there
.in
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In
 2006
church
Correct article usage
the church
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 is left of
Correct article usage
the gorden
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gorden
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Gorden
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 and
house
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the house
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 is south.
in
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In
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 the north has
cinama
Correct article usage
a cinama
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 and in
northwest
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the northwest
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 has parking behind the road.
in
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In
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 1976
cow
Correct article usage
the cow
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 shilde in
east
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the east
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 and chicken in southwest. And
agriculcher
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agriculture
 tool after the road.house in both year in
south
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the south
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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