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Discipline is an ever- increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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One of the main topics that
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 been widely studied is discipline, which is a crucial
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 inculcated
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, many people argue that it is a vital function that should be taught by parents,
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 others state that the main figures involved in
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 are teachers. I am discussing both positions because I openly believe that not only relatives but
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 professors are preponderant
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. To start with, manners are
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 taught by people who nurture their children, during at least 2 or 3 years parents have a vital role
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 instructing owing to their brains, especially when are immature, try to emulate the same actions that are done by others.
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, when I was a child my mother used to read the newspaper during the morning,
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 I replicated it by reading by her side.
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, once brains' children have
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 the basic maturity and synapses during the first years, our
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 and bodies are prepared to deal with socialization. In consequence, students are enrolled from 2
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to
 3 years old, thence at
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 moment schools face
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 stage by teaching and reinforcing traditions and
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, teachers have to impart respect, tolerance and discipline.
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, when my brother was
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 high school did not like mathematics,
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 there was a teacher
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 explained him
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detaily
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 until he understood.
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, he is an
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, either schools or parents are essential to develop and maintain discipline. They should teach self-motivation and the importance of
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 constantly
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 learning from our mistakes without
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Introduction
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Grammar
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Conclusion
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Sentence Structure
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Spelling & Typos
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Content Balance
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Supporting Examples
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • modern schools
  • teachers
  • parents
  • collaboration
  • student behavior
  • performance
  • strategies
  • promoting
  • communication
  • consistency
  • teaching
  • instilling
  • home
  • classroom management
  • authority
  • rules
  • consequences
  • behavioral problems
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