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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the composition of
students
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 in the UK after graduation (graduate and postgraduate) except
full-time
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for full-time
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work
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 in 2018
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the majority
graduates
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of graduates
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 and postgraduate
students
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 are in
further
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study
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.
Otherwise
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, Voluntary
work
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 is the lowest compared among others (Part-time
work
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,
Further
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study
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, and Unemployment). Regarding the
number
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 of graduate
students
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, the highest
number
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 of
the
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apply
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students
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 after graduation in
further
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study
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 accounted for almost 30.000. Following that, part-time
work
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 and unemployment are nearly 18.000 and 16.235, respectively. Voluntary is the smallest
number
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 and it is only 3.500. The majority of postgraduate
students
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 are
further
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 studied in terms of the
number
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 who did not
work
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 after graduation.
Moreover
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, there is no significant difference between the highest
number
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 and the
second,
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which is almost 2.600 compared to 2.725.
Furthermore
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,
further
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study
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 has almost 8 times compared to voluntary
work
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, only 345 and approximately 2 times from unemployment

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, study, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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