The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the composition of

students

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in the UK after graduation (graduate and postgraduate) except

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for full-time

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work

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in 2018

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it is clear that

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the majority

graduates

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of graduates

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and postgraduate

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are in

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study

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Otherwise

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, Voluntary

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is the lowest compared among others (Part-time

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Further

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, and Unemployment). Regarding the

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of graduate

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, the highest

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the

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students

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after graduation in

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study

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accounted for almost 30.000. Following that, part-time

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and unemployment are nearly 18.000 and 16.235, respectively. Voluntary is the smallest

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and it is only 3.500. The majority of postgraduate

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are

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studied in terms of the

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who did not

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after graduation.

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, there is no significant difference between the highest

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and the

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which is almost 2.600 compared to 2.725.

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further

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study

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has almost 8 times compared to voluntary

work

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, only 345 and approximately 2 times from unemployment

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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graduate/postgraduate students
full-time work
further study
part-time education
voluntary work
unemployment
travel/gap year
percentage/proportion
field of study
economic factors
trends
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analysis
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