Robots and artificial intelligent are being developed to replace human in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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considered as an alternative for humans at work. The writer believes that
this
is thanks to the ability to work effortlessly for better outcomes of
robots
.
However
,
this
replacement may adversely affect
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human
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in
term
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of employment. It is acknowledged that automatic machines are able to do the work effectively
in
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24/7. Their durable engines and synchronization as a whole system lead them to
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enhanced speed of
producing
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, giving acceptable results within a short period of time.
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, if they are applied
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workplace
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, it will improve the working quality,
as well as
reduce the amount of money spent
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salary
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, which causes
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of
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financial
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difficulties.
However
, once A.
I with
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robots
are replaced
human
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beings, there will be a great strain
to
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people finding jobs.
This
primarily results in employment when the requirement to be employed is getting more demanding and harder,
while
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or
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workers is limited gradually, causing more
competitive
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in
workplace
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. A survey in English just
last
year showed that there was nearly 80% of total companies started using artificial intelligence in customer services,
while
automatic
system
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had been applied in 70% of factories, ending up
with
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putting more pressure on white-collar and blue-collar workers higher risk of being unemployed. All in all, the replacement of artificial intelligence and
robots
are
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due to
their efficiency
to give
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more satisfying products than humans do, with
chance
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a chance
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of saving a certain amount of money. Still,
this
has an extreme effect on unemployment and those having just graduated
colleges
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to get affordable occupations without much stress.

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