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Do you think that the Latin American left-wing sympathizes with Muslim countries or not, and why is that? Discuss this view.

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I do believe that Latin American left-wing sympathizes with Muslim countries, especially radical Islam, and the reason behind
this
, is that they both are enemies of the West, but they have opposing ideologies,
therefore
 if you remove their common
enemy
, disappear
also
 their sympathy. Whenever there is a conflict between the West and the Muslin world, the Latin American
left-wing
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 takes sides with the Muslin groups, and it is because as we mentioned above, of its antagonism against the capitalist system implemented by the West, but again, if you take away that common
enemy
 from them, they have nothing left in common,
on the contrary
, they become
enemy
 on the spot as they are opposing ideologies. The idea of a society for Muslin is religion-based, which means that the state must be ruled by religious laws, in
this
 case Islam,
therefore
, anything that opposes it or any freedom of worship is banned.
On the other hand
, the left-wing bet on a secular state that guarantees freedom of speech and freedom of worship for everybody. In conclusion, we claim that it is true that the Latin American
left-wing
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 sympathizes with radical Islam, but it is just because they fight the same
enemy
 and not because they share the same values or the same idea of society,
in other words
, naked convenience.
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