Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this is a positive or a negative impact on society?

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The development of virtual

intelligence

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and machines is said to be taking over the

human's

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role in many tasks at the workplace

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of increased efficiency. Critics including me believe that

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is a negative phenomenon

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the rise of global

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level

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. It must be acknowledged that artificial

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intelligence

(

A.I

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) and

robotscan

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robots can

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produce more progress

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humans.

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is especially so when automation is applied globally.

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, the income of factories and restaurants will be boosted as these robotic

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employees

demand no recess periods or salaries

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the cost of purchasing,

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maintenance

and electricity.

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, in many factories in Germany, as

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are utilized as the main workforce, these factories' revenue increased up to 20

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according to

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CNBC. Another argument worth considering is that

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and human-made

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can replace most of the labour work and cognitive

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is because of the deliberation that they

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possess

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, employers would prefer machines to be the main labour force to save resources from possible human errors and

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will lead to ever

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unemployment level, which is already an issue

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ever changing

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world.

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, the agreement to totally replace humans

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robots

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and A.

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could result in riots and crimes.

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VNexpress,

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Formosa

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witnessed

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from high-level employees because they feel that human-made

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might have a possibility of taking over their position. In conclusion,

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increasing working progress, virtual

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and

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could have taken over the human's position with the agreement of the authorities.

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, as that happened, objections will be applied with brutal force by

unemployers

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employees

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coherence

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task response

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Your essay effectively addresses the prompt, showing a clear understanding of the task at hand.

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You've provided relevant, specific examples to support your arguments, such as the factory example from Germany and the VNexpress example, which strengthen your argumentation.

coherence cohesion

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Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Efficiency
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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this is a positive or a negative impact on society?

Your opinion

The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present times. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

As well as making money, businesses also have social resonsibilities, To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that technology causes more problems for modern society than it solves. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause today and what can be done to solve these problems?

Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believed that having more police on the streets is the best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?