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The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The particular map outlines the development of one American
town
 from 1948 to 2010. It can be seen that the
town
 is separated by a canal that comes from east to west and
divide
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 the
town
 to two sides, and the the transformation mostly occurred on the north
side
 of
canal
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the canal
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 with the erection of several contemporary buildings and public amenities. In 1948, the
town
 was originally built for the locals to live and work, which could be noticed from the predominant housing complex and factories. Over six decades;
however
, the
town
 eventually altered its image by erecting several commercial properties, mainly
in
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on
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 the north
side
 of
canal
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the canal
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, which occupied the previous space that
has
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had
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 been used for the working and housing zone and public park.
Although
 the area of
local
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the local
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 supermarket went under
similar
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a similar
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 transformation, the building was relocated
in
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to
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 the south
side
 of
main
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the main
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 road and petrol station. Meanwhile, the area
in
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on
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 the southern
side
 of
canal
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the canal
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 was not significantly modernised, since the housing complex
remain
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remains
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 the same,
whereas
 the old church on the west
side
 of the resident houses has been transformed into
the
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a
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 sports stadium.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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