The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
people
who visited different
places
in Canada in three various races.
Overall
,
it is clear that
cinemas are the most popular locations for all kinds of
people
, and theatres are the
places
people
do not want to go. Looking at the chart
for
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more closely, one can see that for new migrants born in other nations, libraries are the facility they go to the most, and about 55% of them have been
to
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.
However
, going to a library is not that interesting in the other two races. In both Canadian and English-speaking countries immigration, to go to cinemas is the thing they like to do the most, and the
people
who have done that accounted
more
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than 65% in
this
survey. Zoos and libraries are mediocre
places
, and almost half of
people
like to go and half
people
do not like to go. Theatres are the
places
all
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where all
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types of
people
's attendance rates are lower than 25%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, places with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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