The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
people
who visited different places
in Canada in three various races.
Overall
, it is clear that
cinemas are the most popular locations for all kinds of people
, and theatres are the places
people
do not want to go.
Looking at the chart for
more closely, one can see that for new migrants born in other nations, libraries are the facility they go to the most, and about 55% of them have been Change preposition
apply
to
. Correct pronoun usage
to them
However
, going to a library is not that interesting in the other two races. In both Canadian and English-speaking countries immigration, to go to cinemas is the thing they like to do the most, and the people
who have done that accounted more
than 65% in Change preposition
for more
this
survey. Zoos and libraries are mediocre places
, and almost half of people
like to go and half people
do not like to go. Theatres are the places
all
types of Rephrase
where all
people
's attendance rates are lower than 25%.Submitted by edward300225 on
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