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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of households by
people
's yearly salary in America in three different years. The number of earning less than $25,000 in a year shows a slight growth from nearly 25
millions
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million
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 to around 28
millions
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million
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 residents living in America between 2007 and 2011,
while
 it
decrease
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decreased
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 slightly to less than 28
millions
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million
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people
 in 2015.
Moreover
, a similar trend can be seen in the number of households between $25,000 and $49,999 as the figure for
this
 grew from 27
millions
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million
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 or so to nearly 30
millions
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million
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 and
finally
 descended to 28
millions
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million
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.
By contrast
, the amount of annual income ranging from $50,000 to $99,999 remained approximately unchanged from 2007 to 2015.
However
, there are nearly 30
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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dwellers
could
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who could
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 gain more than $100,000 in 2007.
This
 figure reduced to 27
millions
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million
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 in 2011 and
then
 markedly rose to more than 33
millions
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million
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 4 years later.
Overall
, during these three years, the feature of
people
 who are able to earn a specific yearly income remained unchanged despite there
are
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being
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 more
people
 who can gain $100,000 or more in 2015.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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