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The line graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The line graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the consumption of different kinds of spreads from 1981 and 2007.
Overall
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, it is seen that
this
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amount
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 of margarine and butter sold experienced a downward trend. At the beginning of the period, the highest
amount
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 of consumption by customers was butter, recording above 140
grams
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. In five years, it increased slightly before having a sharp decline to 100
grams
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.
On the other hand
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, the figure for margarine remained steady for five years after having a brief decrease in 1986. At that time, there was no low fat & reduced spreads. When the
amount
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 of butter fell
to
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below approximately 70
grams
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, the low-fat spreads started selling, which was only about 10
grams
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.
However
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, it went up rapidly to 80
grams
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 in 2001.
Although
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 it showed a slight drop again, it was recorded as the highest
amount
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 among the three spreads
at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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