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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

#plans #show #site #airport #redevelopment #year
The map illustrates the southwest airport layout now and after innovation in the next year.
Overall
, the airport plans to upgrade
gates
 and
it
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have
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a skytrain
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skytrain
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Skytrain
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instead
 of
walkway
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the walkway
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and
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there are shops before
go
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 into the
gates
 area.
Moreover
, it have many convenient
space
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spaces
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 in the future.
According to
 the map, it can be seen that
departures
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the departures
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 zone has one entrance, cafe and check-in point
then
 there are
move
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move-in
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 check-in point to the right side and cafe to the left side and
additional
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an additional
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a
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bag
drops
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 area. Next to
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 zone, construct a car hire for the passenger arrivals.
Furthermore
, the space has
cafe
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a cafe
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 and ATM. To the above area in the layout, there
have
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is
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 a bit of renovation which
possess
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includes
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 a shopping zone and
recontruction
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reconstruction
 to expand
a
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the
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 number of
gates
 from 8 to 18
gates
. Meanwhile, there
are convert
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is
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 a walkway to a sky train in the new
alter
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altered
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 design.
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structure
Try to structure your essay more clearly, perhaps by using paragraphs to separate the introduction, main body, and conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
conclusion
Introduce a concluding sentence or section to summarize your points and provide a clear endpoint to your essay.
grammar
Be cautious with verb tenses and grammatical agreements. For instance, 'it have skytrain' could be improved to 'it will have a skytrain' to be grammatically correct and clearer in future projection.
vocabulary
Work on the precision and variety of your vocabulary to more effectively convey specific ideas. For example, 'after innovation' could be enhanced to 'after its redevelopment' for clarity and specificity.
linking words
Use linking words more effectively to connect ideas within and between sentences. This can enhance the coherence and flow of your essay.
content
You effectively used maps to compare the current and future airport layouts, providing a clear overview of the changes.
task response
You managed to cover a lot of information and detail about the proposed changes to the airport, which is good for task completion.

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