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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 chart compares the amount of
electricity
 production and
comsumption
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consumption
on
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 10 countries in 2014.
Overall
,
China
 is the
country
 which
produced
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the
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electricity
 the most.
China
 has produced 5.396 kwh which
ten
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 times bigger than the
country
that is
 located nearby to them, Korea. With the significant
number
 that
China
 has produced, the amount of
consumption
also
 was very huge.
China
's
electricity
consumption
reach
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to
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5,322
kwh
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kWh
. It can be said that
China
 consumed almost 90% of its productivity.
On the other hand
, Germany made up to 526,6
kwh
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kWh
 per year, but the
number
 of
electricity
 that they used
reach
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to
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582,5. It
conclude
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 that Germany needs more effort to make
the
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production and
consumption
 equal. In terms of balance, we can agree that Russia and Korea
was
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were
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 the
country
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countries
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 that
can
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 make and use
the
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electricity
 with only
1
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a 1
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point difference, respectively.
Morover
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Moreover
,
on
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in
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 2014, India was the only
country
 that the
number
 of production
reach
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reached
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 a surplus
comparing
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compared
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 to the
number
 of
consumption
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, china, country, number, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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