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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the total count of minutes with
billions
 of telephone calls in the UK, which point out in three lines (local-fixed
line
, National and international-fixed
line
, mobiles-all calls), between 1995 and 2002. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, at the onset
it is clear that
 national and international-fixed lines and mobile usage were in an upward trend,
while
 local-fixed
line
 calls
depicted
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 in a variation in 1995-2002 years. As can be seen from the graph, national and international-fixed
line
 calls were slowly climbing, starting with nearly 40
billions
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billion
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 calls in a
minute
 in 1995, and ending with 60
billions
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billion
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 calls in a
minute
 in 2002.
Whereas
 Mobiles calls
initially
 were done
the
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less than 5
billions
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billion
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 in a
minute
, the count of
this
 usage
were skyrocketing
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 in
following
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the following
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 years,
and
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reaching almost 45
billions
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billion
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 in a
minute
 in 2002. Local fixed-
line
 calls, which were more than 70
billions
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billion
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 in a
minute
 at the beginning, were gradually rising until 1999 and
hited
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 a high of, nearly 90
billions
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billion
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. After 1999,
such
 type calls were significantly decreasing until 2002,
reached
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a
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the
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 same count in a
minute
, nearly more than 70 billion in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions, line, minute with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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