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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011

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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of expenditure on four different categories in China in two periods years 1995 and 2001.
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, it can clearly be seen that the two biggest spending were food and clothing which contributed more than three-fourths in both times. Medicine and Household goods became the lowest money to be spent. In terms of two majority expenditures, Food and Clothing stood at 68% and 19% in 1995, respectively.
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 the number for food experienced a deep fall by 9% in 2011, it was still the biggest category of the bill.
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, the spending on clothing decreased slightly to 18% after 16 years. Regarding the other category with a lower percentage, household goods accounted for 9% in the first period before it experienced a slight growth to 12% in 2011. The smallest spending was on clothing constituted 4% in 1995 but the number witnessed a steep increase in 2011 to just 1% over one-ten.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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