Many university students live with their families while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations

Some
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In some
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education
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educational
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institutions
pupils
live together
their
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with their
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parents
while
others live away from
house
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the house
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because their
education
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educational
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institutions are in
kind
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a kind
the kind
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of places. There are a lot of advantages and disadvantages of both conditions. From one perspective,
students
live together
their
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with their
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families. It is very good for
pupils
because they
have
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do
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not
miss
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apply
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suffer difficult challenges, lack
from
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apply
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money,
hungry
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hunger
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,
anxiety
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or anxiety
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from their
parents
. They will be
health
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healthy
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, especially
parents
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if parents
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do not worry
from
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about
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children
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their children
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and
be
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apply
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care, carefully
to
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for
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offspring
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their offspring
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at
house
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the house
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.
Besides
that,
students
think only
education
knowledge,
have
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is
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not hazardous , bad hurt ideology, notion because mothers and fathers
gives
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give
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adrenaline, strong motivation , big care for
children
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their children
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. Others do not live with families because will not be might university in their country or
further
to university their home , in
this
situation , many
students
live in
flats
. They have very much leisure time and
doing
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do
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homework .
This
place
be
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is
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quite
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quiet
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and
pupils
concentrate. In their free time, go to the
student centred
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student-centred
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education
. From another angle, if
students
live
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leave
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their mothers and fathers
while
have not time for homework, go to the add subjects. Meanwhile do not continue private interests.
Pupils
live
further
from
parents
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their parents
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, they pay extremely much money
their
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for their
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flats
and will be
might
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apply
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sick , ill because in currently,
has
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have
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cold, bad
flats
. Every year all
students
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the students
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live
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in this
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this
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these
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flats
so they do not fix , there are vital
issue
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issues
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in
flat
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the flat
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. In conclusion, there are many
students
today. They live with their
parents
while
others live away from
house
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the house
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because their universities are in
kind
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a kind
the kind
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of
places
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place
show examples
.
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