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The pie charts below show percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts provide an overview of
water
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usage
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 in six different
regions
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: North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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. In general, the majority of
water
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 in four
regions
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 is used for agricultural purposes,
while
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 the remaining two
regions
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 primarily utilize
water
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 for industrial processes. Central
Asia
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 has the highest proportion of
water
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usage
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 for cultivation at 88%, followed by Africa at 84%, Southeast
Asia
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 at 81%, and South
America
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 at 71%. Domestic use accounts for 7-19% of
water
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 consumption in these
regions
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. The remaining percentage, around 10%, is allocated to industrial purposes.
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, Southeast
Asia
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 has a higher industrial
usage
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 at 12% and a slightly lower domestic
usage
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 at 7%.
In contrast
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, Europe and North
America
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 allocate approximately half of their
water
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 for industrial purposes, with around 53% and 48% respectively. Agriculture accounts for about 35% of
water
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usage
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 in these
regions
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,
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 domestic use represents the smallest proportion, at roughly 15% for both continents.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, regions, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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