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Clarity & Argument
Consider refining your introduction to clearly present your standpoint regarding the positive or negative impacts, which will enhance the clarity of your argument.
Specific Examples
Avoid generalized statements without specific examples. For instance, citing precise technological advancements or specific sectors impacted by AI and robots could strengthen your argument.
Sentence Structure
Work on the variety of sentence structures to make your essay more engaging and to demonstrate a wider proficiency in English.
Grammar & Typos
Be mindful of grammatical errors and typos such as 'because of the developing of robots' instead of 'because of the development of robots'. These minor inaccuracies can distract from the overall clarity of your argument.
Balanced Argument
You effectively identified and explored both sides of the argument, considering both benefits and disadvantages of AI and robots in the workplace.
Effective Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay, reinforcing your viewpoint and inviting further reflection on the issue.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.