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The chart below shows the total number of journeys per year for a European city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of journeys per year for a European city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given chart shows car
journeys
 made in a period of 9 years by residents and non
resident
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residents
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 to a
europeon
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European
city
.
Overall
, it shows a
consistant
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consistent
dicline
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decline
 between both
resident
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residents
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 and
non-resident
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non-residents
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 which
are
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is
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a
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an
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 effect caused by parking meters in
city
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the city
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 centre and closed roads in
city
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the city
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.
To begin
 with, the residents used to
travel
city
 consistently with over 9000
journeys
 between 4 year period of 1996 to 1999. Non-resident
travel
journeys
 to the
city
 grew rapidly from 5000 to 8000
in
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apply
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initially
.
However
, these
travel
journeys
 steeped down to 4000 over the 9 years period as a
concequence
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consequence
 of
introduction
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the introduction
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 of parking meters and closed roads at
westgate
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Westgate
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 street and part lane to traffic, 5000
travel
journeys
 back for non-residents as it was back in 1996.
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