The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Amanine Bakers,
Mari
Bakeshop
and Bold Cakery in Calgary from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the amending bakers and bold cakery experienced substantial growth over 11 years of the
period
,
while
the
Mari
bakeshop
decreased. The unit of measurement is dollars.
To begin
with, in 2000, the Amandine Bakery and
Mari
Bakeshop
were at nearly $60000 and almost $80000 respectively. In the meantime, the Amandine Bakers's earnings remained stable until 2005.
Consequently
, it had a sharp rise, reaching to above $100000. The amount in dollars is higher than others at all times.
In contrast
, the figure for
Mari
Bakeshop
saw modest growth and peaked at above $87000 in 2004.
However
, it had a dramatic decline, accounting for $60000 in 2007 and it decreased again to $40000
at the end
of the
period
. Looking at details, the yearly earnings for Amandine Bakery were at n $20000 at the beginning of the
period
,
whereas
it grew two times in 2003.
Moreover
, it remained stable from 2003 to 2006.
In addition
, it experienced a steady rise by one-third in two years between 2006 and 2008, reported above $60000.
Finally
, it upward to under $65000, increasing by nearly $5000
at the end
of the
period
in question.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mari, bakeshop, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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