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The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#park #surroundings #information #features #comparisons
The information about the modifications made to
the
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Grange
Park
 from
past
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 till now is depicted by the given picture chart. The data is calibrated in the form of
pictorial
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a pictorial
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 representation.
Overall
, the area under Grange
park
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 underwent several changes and a lot of developments can be noticed. In the past,
on
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 the west direction, there was a stage for musicians to perform and just opposite
to
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it was a fountain in the centre of the
park
. On the adjacent sides of the stage, there were two rose gardens and the third rose
garden
 was located
on
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in
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 the
north-east
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northeast
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 direction and next to it, was a pond for water plants. With regard to
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the south-east
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south-east
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southeast
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 side,
glasshouse
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a glasshouse
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 was seen located there. Now, the
park
 around the boundaries has only one rose
garden
 in the left top corner and
other
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another
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 rose
garden
 in the north-east direction has been converted into a cafe. The old stage has been replaced by the Amphitheatre for concerts
along with
this
 sitting arrangements are made.
Also
, the fountain has been replaced by the bigger rose
garden
 which is surrounded by chairs for the visitors. The significant replacement of
glasshouse
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the glasshouse
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 has been made with a water feature for decorative purposes.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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