The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The pie chart shows the percentage of European union funds being spent on different forms of transport.

The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The pie chart shows the percentage of European union funds being spent on different forms of transport.
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The graph represents the amount of CO2 emitted by the various means of transport in the European Union,
while
the pie chart illustrates the
the
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proportion
of money used for the various modes of transport by the European Union.
Overall
, in the bar
graph
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it is clear that
air made the highest CO2 emissions, whilst
pie
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chart
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that
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percentage of
EU
funds
was utilized by roads. With regard to
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graph, personal cars emitted 125
grams
of CO2 per passenger and just half of it were buses with a contribution of 72
grams
of CO2 per passenger.
Furthermore
, coaches had
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smallest
proportion
of
emission
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around 40
grams
of CO2 per passenger
whereas
maritime and rail had similar proportions which
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just below 50
grams
of CO2.
However
, air is the highest CO2 emitter with a figure of 375
grams
of CO2. Moving towards the pie chart, the maximum
proportion
(52%) of
EU
funds
were used for
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road construction and 31% of
EU
funds
were utilized for the maintenance of railways.
Moreover
, the
EU
funds
invested in the public
transports
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had a
proportion
of a tenth.
Lastly
, Intermodal, Inland waterways, Ports and Airports had a negligible
proportion
in terms of
EU
funds
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words co, proportion, eu, funds, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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