The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the Australian employees by their job kinds and genders in
previous
year. The professions are divided into 7 categories.
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the previous
Overall
, it is clear that
male workers are dominating most of the scales. In terms of women, clerical is the most common job among them slightly more than males. By contrast
, tradespeople and production are the occupations that are least worked by them. Whereas
men
are five-fold more than them in production and in tradespeople
they are exactly 9 times more than females which is the job that they are most enrolled in. Add a comma
tradespeople,
Furthermore
, the occupation that they worked the least is labourers where the females are slightly lower than them.
Moreover
, manager
is occupied by women 3 times lower than Add an article
the manager
a manager
men
. Subsequently
, professionals almost have no difference in them, but the numbers of men
are lower compared to females. Finally
, semi-professionals are mostly occupied by men
where
women have a one-thrid decrease Correct word choice
whereas
than
Change preposition
apply
them
.Correct pronoun usage
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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