Nowadays children spend lots of time watching television and playing conputers games. However, it does not help in improving children's mental abilities do you agree or disagree.

Evidence suggests that, today children tend to spend their time on

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electronic

devices

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as TV and

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gaming as a matter of habit.

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some assert that these activities do not

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their intelligence. I believe that the brain of

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youngsters

can

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these hobbies owing to a number of compelling reasons.

To begin

with, the most rational justification is that electronic game

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and TV can be instructive.

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, the young ones who

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encounter

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TV programs and video games

ferequently

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frequently

, learn new skills unconsciously. A good illustration of

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is, learning

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language through

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cartoons and games which are provided in

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.

This

phenomenon leads to children learning

while

they are entertained.

Furthermore

,

this

behaviour may reduce stress and

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anxiety

among

youngesters

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youngsters

. In

this

modern world children are

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by mental

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like adults and watching an exciting television show or a stimulating video game can

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relieve

their stress and make them feel more

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and relief. Yet, another compelling argument is that

youngesters

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who use

electronical

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electronic

gadgets to spend their time are more likely to respond

toward

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real life

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problems. To put it differently, most of these hobbies

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hard tasks to do and usually are mentally demanding,

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the youngs' mind.

For instance

their self-confidence

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increases

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after achieving the final stage of a competitive computer game so they feel, they are good enough to take responsibility

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almost every issue in their life.

To sum up

, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, new entertainment

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causes

youngesters

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to be

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amused

and

also

flourish.

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is mainly

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because

they boost the young ones'

brain

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and give them

this

opportunity to live better.