Nowadays children spend lots of time watching television and playing conputers games. However, it does not help in improving children's mental abilities do you agree or disagree.
Evidence suggests that, today children tend to spend their time on
electronical
devices Correct your spelling
electronic
such
as TV and computer based
gaming as a matter of habit. Add a hyphen
computer-based
However
some assert that these activities do not Add a comma
However,
effect
their intelligence. I believe that the brain of Correct your spelling
affect
youngesters
can Correct your spelling
youngsters
be flourished
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flourish
by
these hobbies owing to a number of compelling reasons.
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To begin
with, the most rational justification is that electronic game equipments
and TV can be instructive. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
That is
, the young ones who are
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apply
with
TV programs and video games Change preposition
apply
ferequently
, learn new skills unconsciously. A good illustration of Correct your spelling
frequently
this
is, learning second
language through Add an article
a second
out
cartoons and games which are provided in Change preposition
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other country
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other countries
This
phenomenon leads to children learning while
they are entertained. Furthermore
, this
behaviour may reduce stress and axiety
among Correct your spelling
anxiety
youngesters
. In Correct your spelling
youngsters
this
modern world children are effected
by mental Correct your spelling
affected
deseases
like adults and watching an exciting television show or a stimulating video game can Correct your spelling
diseases
realse
their stress and make them feel more Correct your spelling
relieve
relax
and relief.
Yet, another compelling argument is that Wrong verb form
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youngesters
who use Correct your spelling
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electronical
gadgets to spend their time are more likely to respond Correct your spelling
electronic
toward
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to
the
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apply
real life
problems. To put it differently, most of these hobbies Add a hyphen
real-life
are included
hard tasks to do and usually are mentally demanding, Wrong verb form
include
therefore
; strengthen
the youngs' mind. Wrong verb form
strengthening
For instance
their self-confidence increaces
after achieving the final stage of a competitive computer game so they feel, they are good enough to take responsibility Correct your spelling
increases
increase
of
almost every issue in their life.
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for
To sum up
, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, new entertainment equipments
causes Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
youngesters
to be Correct your spelling
youngsters
ammused
and Correct your spelling
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also
flourish. This
is mainly becuse
they boost the young ones' Correct your spelling
because
brain
and give them Fix the agreement mistake
brains
this
opportunity to live better.Submitted by m.tavasoli18 on
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