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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 line graph depicts
number
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a number
the number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 in millions visiting a specific
carribean
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caribbean
 island in
years
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the years
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 between 2010
ane
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and
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 2017. It is clear from the graph that the
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number
numbera
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number
 of
visitors
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 in
increase
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increased
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, beginning from 1 at least and going up to 1.5 and more in
period
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a period
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 of 7 years.
According to
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 what is shown in spite of
Visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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was
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apply
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fluctuated
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships chart
as well as
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Total
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the Total
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 chart were similar to each other,
however
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 as
Total
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the Total
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 rose
start
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started
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 from 1 and continued dramatically soar in
period
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the period
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 between 2012 and 2014, until
reach
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reached
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 3.5 million
of
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apply
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visitors
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,
on the other
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hand
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Visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 rate was like
wave
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a wave
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with
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apply
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gradually
rose
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rising
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in
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from
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 2011 to 2016,
slightly
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and slightly
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declined
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declining
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 in 2016.
To sum up
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 I should analyse the
last
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 one which is, ta
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships ,
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There hug
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hug
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huge
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 change between 2013 and 2017
that is
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 was after a
slowly decreased
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 in 2012 , to reach 2 million in the end.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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