The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of hours that people spend on different activities in certain
country
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in the years 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, the activities related to work and personal interests took more time in 2008,
while
people spent fewer hours sleeping and hanging out with friends and families,
According to
the graph, working had a dramatic increase from 33% to 42% in 2008. Travel to work, which used to be the least portion in 1958, has the same trend with a 5% rise to 8%, same as relaxing at home from 8% to 13%.
In addition
, personal activities with hobbies and sports got a slight increase from 6% to 8%.
On the other hand
, sleeping used to be the second highest proportion with 32%,
then
it declined to 25% in 2008. Going out
also
has a significant drop with a 13% decrease, which became the lowest percentage in 2008.
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