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Many believe that an effective public transport system is a key component of modern city. What are the advantages and disadvantages of public transport?

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It is argued that an effective public
transport
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 system is a key
featurs
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feature
features
 of a modern country.
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state
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 that
reduce
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reducing
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environment
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environmental
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 pollution and
traffic
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jam
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 are
main
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 advantages
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 social gartering and lack of
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management
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 are the primary disadvantages.
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, public
transport
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help
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 to reduce
the
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environment
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 pollution. If
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public
trasport
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transport
are
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 available
then
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 many people
encourage
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 to
use
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this
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 opportunity rather
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then
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than
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 private
transport
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. For
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, when the amount of
car
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cars
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 are decreased in number it is possible to reduce the carbon footprint and
safe
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save
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environment
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.
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, research
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conduct
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 with Social journal media in
previous
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the previous
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 month and they found that the
reduced
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 of carbon
dieoxide
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dioxide
 is caused by
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use
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the use
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private
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of private
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transport
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.
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,
of
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if
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 the number of private
transport
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decrease
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then
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traffic
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jam
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jams
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 reduced very early because it
occurs
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occur
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 when too many
vihcles
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vehicles
 run
in
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on
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 one
roads
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road
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parking
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 road
sides
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. So, it is the primary
advantages
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 that if
majority
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the majority
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 of people
use
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public
transport
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instead
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transport
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,
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and
production
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the production
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od
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of
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dieoxide
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dioxide
 reduce gradually.
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gattering
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gathering
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the
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time
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management
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 are the disadvantages of
public
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the public
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transport
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 system. We see a primary example of
bad
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the bad
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 impact of social
gattering
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gathering
durion
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during
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 the
pendamic
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pandemic
endemic
 in 2020 when the
covid19
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COVID-19
 virus spread by
the
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social
gattering
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gathering
 extremely. Not only
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, there are chances to spread
other virus disease
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 in public
transport
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 as those are too
gattering
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gathering
guttering
.
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,
time
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management
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 of
the
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public
transport
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are
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 the main issue.
A
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conduct
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 by Star media news channel
and
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most of the passengers said that they often ignore
the
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public
transport
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for
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because of
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 poor
time
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management
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 as they
use
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 it for their work or office. In conclusion, though the
reduce
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reduction
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 of
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environment
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environmental
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 pollution and
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 is the
advantages
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advantage
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 of public
transport
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 the drawbacks are
time
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management
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 and the social
gattering
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gathering
gatherings
 which
are
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occur by the public
transport
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 system.
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grammar
It's important to consistently check and correct grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'gartering' should be 'gathering', and 'dieoxide' should be 'dioxide'. These small errors can distract from your argument.
structure
Carefully organize your essay to enhance readability. Include clear topic sentences for each paragraph that directly relate to the advantages and disadvantages being discussed.
language
Ensure you use a variety of sentence structures to showcase your language ability. This includes a mix of complex and compound sentences to make your points more compelling.
content
Try to include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. Specific examples make your essay more informative and persuasive.
structure
You have a clear thesis statement that sets up the structure of the essay effectively.
content
You provided a balanced view on the topic, effectively discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
content
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes the essay's main points and reiterates your stance, showing good task achievement.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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